[vox-outreach] Draft brochure for Tux4Kids
Lee Welter
vox-outreach@lists.lugod.org
Fri, 2 Jan 2004 10:33:36 -0800
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Hi Bill,
I have some other chores to do right now, but I don't want to postpone =
indefinitely what little I have done with your brochure. The brochure =
is informative and visually appealing. My wordsmithing is mainly aimed =
at streamlining it a little.
Here are some minor suggested revisions of your text:
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
Regarding the header,
"High Quality
Educational
Software
Alternatives"
I would consider deleting "Alternatives" and maybe (just maybe) =
inserting "Affordable" or "Low Cost" between "High Quality" and =
"Educational." Purchase cost is not always the major criterion of a wise =
decision, since usability, time invested in learning, and other issues =
are also relevant "cost" factors. In light of that, "Intelligent =
Alternative" might be suitable for the header.
Following are two revised segments of text:
Tux4Kids is an international organization of volunteers dedicated to =
producing and promoting quality educational software under certified =
Open Source Initiative* licenses (see definition below).
Tux4Kids makes software available for Linux, Windows, Mac OS X and other =
operating systems. A growing number of schools is already using these =
applications.
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I hope to do more with this very soon, but my other chores await.
Lee Welter
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From: "Bill Kendrick" <nbs@sonic.net>
To: "LUGOD Outreach" <vox-outreach@lists.lugod.org>
Sent: Friday, January 02, 2004 12:23 AM
Subject: [vox-outreach] Draft brochure for Tux4Kids
> . . . decided I'd ask the vox-outreach readers what THEY thought, =
since I'm so eager. :^)
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> So what do you folks think?
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brochure is=20
informative and visually appealing. My wordsmithing is mainly aimed =
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streamlining it a little.</DIV>
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<P align=3Dleft>Here are some minor suggested revisions of your =
text:<BR> * *=20
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<P align=3Dleft>Regarding the header,</P>
<P align=3Dleft>"High Quality</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Educational</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Software</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Alternatives"</P>
<P align=3Dleft>I would consider deleting "Alternatives" and maybe (just =
maybe)=20
inserting "Affordable" or "Low Cost" between "High Quality" and=20
"Educational." Purchase cost is not always the major criterion of a =
wise=20
decision, since usability, time invested in learning, and other =
issues are=20
also relevant "cost" factors. In light of that, "Intelligent =
Alternative" might=20
be suitable for the header.</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Following are two revised segments of text:</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Tux4Kids is an international organization of volunteers =
dedicated=20
to producing and promoting quality educational software =
under certified=20
Open Source Initiative* licenses (see definition below).</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Tux4Kids makes software available for Linux, Windows, =
Mac OS X and=20
other operating systems. A growing number of schools is already using =
these=20
applications.<BR> * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * =
* * *=20
*</P>
<P align=3Dleft>I hope to do more with this very soon, but my other =
chores=20
await.</P>
<P align=3Dleft>Lee Welter</P></DIV>
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href=3D"mailto:nbs@sonic.net">nbs@sonic.net</A>></DIV>
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href=3D"mailto:vox-outreach@lists.lugod.org">vox-outreach@lists.lugod.org=
</A>></DIV>
<DIV>Sent: Friday, January 02, 2004 12:23 AM</DIV>
<DIV>Subject: [vox-outreach] Draft brochure for Tux4Kids</DIV></DIV>
<DIV><BR></DIV><BR>> . . . decided I'd ask the vox-outreach readers =
what THEY=20
thought, since I'm so eager. :^)<BR>> <BR>> So what do you folks=20
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